DATE
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DESCRIPTION/DURATION
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ACTION
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14/7
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Exibition planning: Year 7s; (9:00 – 1:00)
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Contribute to collaborative planning; collect resources for
students to experiment with.
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18/7
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Non-contact 10-4: Organising classroom resources/wall
displays; began math/literacy planning
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Threw away loads of ‘junk’ and orientated myelf with students
books/classroom layout etc
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19/7
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Non-contact 11-4: Shared in on term overview and how to
organise planning on google docs (shown by Rach VH); introduced to using Sites
to create a class ‘blog’; using e-asTTle to create formative tests; Will be
teaching Spanish during Teaming, found Spanish resources in LC (thanks Rach!)
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Continue planning checking on Rachel’s planning and working
collaboratively to complete. Begin planning for Spanish.
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25/7
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Team Meeting: Term 3 Curriculum overview and collaborative planning/teaching; UOI4
HWOO discussion (resources); duty expectations;
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Continue planning & building connections with Room 9 and the
Te Aroha Team
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26/7
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Staff Meeting 3:30: Waiata (E noho Tuheitia) practice;
e-portfolio discussion (are students up to date/do they know how to add
information?); Information evening (organisation/expectations); Prospectus
2017 (read through; specific focus on STEAM Y9 programme)
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Discuss with Amelia what she would like me to do. Meghana’s name
put forward to be a speaker; push forward the idea of students remaining as
Y9s.
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2/8
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Staff Meeting Exhibition: Exhibition SUP Planner details; Y7
expectations and organisation of lessons/management; collaboration
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Meet Monday Week 3; Contribute to Y7 planning
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3/8
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Lighthouse Meeting: Opportunities for Lighthouse Learners
within school; LHL to reflect on their year so far; How are we meeting their
needs in the classroom?; Gifted And Talented evening: learning about teaching
GAT students
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Continue to talk with Regan about LHL and learn strategies for
deeper learning; give students opportunityt o reflect. Think about
registering for GAT evening
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8/8
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Information Evening catch up with Amelia: discussed how the room
will look and what my role is, as well as costume ideas.
Y7:
Exhibition meeting with Ed, Sarah, & Duncan: collaboration of SUP planner
and organisation of resources.
Meet
The Teacher, 3:20 with C Roach: Discussed the plans for the term, my
expectations, & establishing a positive rapport with Adam.
Tutor
Teacher meeting: Information on Google Doc. Discussed release plan; students
of concern; Room 9 homework
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Amelia is on top of organisation, I just have to show up!
Contributed minimally to plannig but, will step up my involvement
by adding to planning and searching for more teachable resources.
Feeling positive about connection with Adam and his mum.
Plans on GD
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9/8
|
Meet the Teacher: 7:20am with C. Pentecost
Meet
the Teacher, 11:30am with W Dong
Exhibition
meeting, 3:15
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Refer C to ELC for help with reading comp.
W Dong happy with her daughter’s achievement just asks that I challenge her as much as possible. Exhibition planning explained. Still need to add to SUP planner |
10/8
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Staff meeting:
Information
evening, Drama support:
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12/8
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Tutor teacher (Rachel van Hueven)::
Students of concern; plan for release
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TB on daily report; observation of analysing persuasive
advertising during first half of release
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15/8
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Meet the Teacher: 3:30pm with R Wilson
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Discussion about J’s needs and how she is currently going. Happy
with teacher change-over
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16/8
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Staff Meeting e-portfolio: Student’s needs and how we can best teach
understanding of e-portfolio. Meeting with Justine (TB’s mum):
Concerned about daily report and the reasons behind it.
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Continue to collaborate
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17/8
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PCT with Wendy: Gail
Day; preparation; expectations; reading chapter 1-2 of ‘The Language of
Influence in Teaching’ and providing feedback
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Meet with Rach and plan for Gail Day
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17/8
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Tutor Teacher (Rachel van Hueven):
Planning for Gail observations; discuss students of concern and how class is
going;
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Planning up to 3 lessons, for Gail day, aboout persuasive writing
including an informal debate. Still concerned with some students behaviour
that is negatively impacting the class
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19/8
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Market Day: Setting up stalls durng third block; handing out gloves for food
safety; discussing table layout; cutting onions!/
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Counting up each students cash box at the end of the day and
entering amounts into a google spreadsheet. Using formulas to work out
profit/loss
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23/8
|
Staff Meeting: Gail Loane: Analysing writing samples; quick write
(factual) with autumnal leaves as a prompt; shared writing with group and
talked about how hard it was not to be emotive when writing factually, but
can be descriptive;
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Incorporating creative writing through quick writes into the classroom
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25/8
|
Gail Observation: Block one (9-9:30); Finishing second lesson
lesson of persuasive article/text. Recapped previous lesson, (which was
interrupted by an opportunity to listen to a Food Technologist) and continued
with moving students towards a debate in order to develop use of cause and
effect statements and persuasive language.
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Although extremely nervous I was quite happy with how the
lessonwent. I have some really fabulous students
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25/8
|
School Dance 6:30 – 9:40: Supported Rongo (canteen), to sell food and
drinks to students from the musci room entrance. Support also from T Ahie, C
Hogg, and C Donnelly. Took turns serving and popped into Whanau Hui (20mins)
in the staffroom to show support. Spent the last 20mins dancing with students
and then making sure students were picked up, and then helping to clean
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Collaborated with other staff, connected with a range of students
and started getting a sore throat!!
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30/8
|
Staff Meeting: Missed due
to illness
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Follow up with team members
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31/8
|
Lighthouse Learners Meeting: Missed due to illness
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Catch up with Beth Germaine
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31/8
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Tutor Teacher Meeting: Missed due to illness
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Catch up with Rach vH
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1/9
|
Staff Meeting: Began with Waiata E Noho To Hei Tia
Te Reo
Maaori; iPPit plan; Oral Choral; IRDPX
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Will be adding more rich tasks when teaching Spanish and Te Reo
Maaori, such as ping ponging and looping.
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Team meeting: Beth UOI discussion.
How
the UOI is taught in our classrooms (team); What summative tasks look like;
how we as teachers give feedback/feedforward to students; managing the tasks
in the time given
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Provide explicit teacher feedback as often as possible; May be
provided with a Stamp to manage feedback more effectively
|
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6/9
|
Staff Meeting: PYP. Began with waiaita: E Noho To Hei Tia
The
inquiry cycle’s connections to the PYP; how we use the inquiry cycle at
Berkley; the inquiry cycle is cross-curricular; expert group/home group
strategy used; Misconceptions about inquiry cycles; form of inquiry cycles
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Student led links to the inquiry cycle; including connectins to
the inquiry cycle across the curriculum;
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7/9
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Tream Meeting: Pallet lesson reflection (verbal), uploading
photos to shared folder.
Arranging
timetable and resources for UOI5 Pulley lesson & lessons for Week 8.
|
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7/9
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Tutor Teacher (Rachel van Hueven): Filling in google doc: Areas to discuss;
students to discuss; looking forward…
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8/9
|
Report Writing Meeting: Expectations and requirements still the same
as last year. Slight change in access to report blanks.
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Begin in Holidays. Collect assessment marks from Etap, NZCER and
e-asTTle
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8/9
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Communication with parent: Called CP’s dad to discuss repetative
non-compliance in and outside of the classroom. Dad was happy with strategies
that have been put in place. CP has been removed from class and supported in
the ELC. Working towards making his way back into room 9
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Ongoing communication with Judy in the Elc to see how CP is
going. Open communication with dad. Will be in touch about progress by 16/9
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13/9
|
Team Meeting: PLR (Priorty Learning Registar), filling in
math WALTs for target students and their progress with knowledge development.
Target students identified and records of progress up to date
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Continue to monitor and support identified PLR students.
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13/9
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Staff Meeting PYP: Continued review of inquiry cycle; initial
group discussions revisiting misconceptions; small group work looking at a
range of other inquiry cycles and choosing elements that may suit a change to
the current BNMS interpretation.
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Continue to deliver learning through the use of inquiry cycle,
but iencourage student owenership through discussion and choices of
connections. Doesn’t have to be so prescribed (linear)
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15/9
|
Team Meeting, e-asTTle moderation: Two
examples of students work from Room 9 was moderated alongside Pip. Annotating
and deliberating their level. Chosen levels had to be justified using the
exemplars and e-asTTle marking rubric.
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Have marked 6. Need to continue marking and have faith that I am
on the right track. Quite enjoying marking this persuasive piece!
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22/9
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Parent Meeting: Regan support. Meeting JH’s Father to discuss behaviour and
self-management. Father was very open and reciprocal. Discussed strategies to
work towards better self-management, and attitudes/responses towards
learning/peers
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JH to do any form of writing on laptop and create Agenda doc each
week to share with parents and myself. Discussed safe space to use when
feeling frustrated/angry; Father fully supportive, Mother no-show.
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This is where I show evidence of how I have met the New Zealand Practising Teacher Criteria (PTC) and continue to meet the Registered Teacher Criteria
Pages
- Home
- Practising Teacher Criteria (PTC)
- PTC1 - Relationships
- PTC2 - Wellbeing
- PTC3 - Bicultural Partnerships
- PTC4 - Professional Development
- PTC5 - Leadership
- PTC6 - Learning Programme
- PTC7 - Learning Environment
- PTC8 - Learning Styles
- PTC9 - Strengths, Needs & Interests
- PTC10 - Bicultural NZ
- PTC11 - Assessment
- PTC12 - Critical Inquiry
Tuesday, 18 October 2016
Weekly Log: Term 3 2016
Staff Meeting - PYP/Exhibition - 18/10
Staff Meeting - PYP/Exhibition - 3:30 - 4:30
Berkley Exhibition 2016 Logistics
Date and Times
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Thursday 20 October
2:00pm to 2:30pm School viewing (ref. notes below)
5:30 to 6:30pm Community viewing
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Locations
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Aranui + Art Exhibition = Rec Centre (Teaming to be outside or in the CC that day).
Mahi Tahi = ELC + Learning Centre (Please check with Penny and Judy regarding access to these spaces on the day).
Te Aroha = Room 7, 8, 9 + 8A
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Questions/Prompts
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Prompts for teachers
Tell me about the problem you chose.
Tell me about your lines of inquiry.
What was the process that you went through?
What is the most important idea that you have learnt from your inquiry?
How do you know that?
Has your thinking changed? If so, how?
Is there more than one viewpoint about your issue?
What did you learn from other students in your team?
What do you think might happen with your issue in the future?
What would you like to see changed?
How have you recorded or sorted your information?
How does this learning connect with other subjects, topics or issues?
Can you suggest a solution?
Prompts for the community
Tell me about the problem you chose.
What have you enjoyed the most about the exhibition process?
What have you found the most challenging?
What skills have you had to demonstrate to be successful?
What type of ‘action’ has come from your inquiry?
What would you like us to do/know?
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Tokens
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What would be the purpose of this?
What are the benefits? What are the possible constraints?
Do we want to go ahead with this idea? Decision was no.
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Year 7 hosts + Pamphlet
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Year 7 hosts = Sarah A
Exhibition Pamphlet = Beth
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After school Facilities activities (Alli Fairey/Jamie)
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Afterschool Music – Music room/media/Cultural Centre
Rec Centre - Taekwondo moved to the Cultural Centre
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BBQ/Sausage Sizzle
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Edwin + Caro + Alison C
$2 per sausage (funds going towards Year 9 trip to Wellington)
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Afternoon Buses
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Students to meet outside on front of office.
Pete has made a plan b for if wet.
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Timetable
Teaming (O
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Thursday 20 October Day 2
Tech Arts
Block 1 Tainui
Block 2 Rangahau
Block 3 Kia Kaha
Block 4 Exhibition Support (No Academies or ELC programme)
Teaming
Block 1 Mahi Tahi
Block 2 Aranui
Block 3 Te Aroha
Block 4 Exhibition Support (No Academies)
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School Viewing
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Classes are welcome to view the presentations between 2:00pm - 2:30pm on Thursday.
Teachers - please prepare your students visiting the exhibition to be informed, active and supportive visitors to the teams and their exhibits. Classes are expected to move through the exhibition spaces as a group supervised by their teacher.
Possible prompts for the learners to be shared with classroom teachers.
Teachers consider what you need to find out during this time.
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Thank you drinks
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7:00pm
Everyone who supported exhibition welcome.
Location TBC
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Have been doing my utmost to arrange a donation of sausages (at least 200), from Pak N Save, Clarence Street. Before, after school, and during break times I have phoned and emailed Geanna from Management. As of 4:20pm on the 18/10 I am yet to receive confirmation/or not.
I will be supporting Ed on the BBQ sausage sizzle, helping to make year seven's are in the correct place, and supporting student's as the community learn about their Exhibition journey/understanding.
Monday, 17 October 2016
Room 9 Class Blog
I am really proud of the class blog I have created for Room 9. It can be found here
From the beginning of term three I have worked studiously to set up and maintain a class blog for Room 9. This blog allows learners, parents/caregivers, and the wider community to view the learning that Room 9 undertakes in and outside the classroom.
The blog also enables me to maintain a connection with the learners, parents/caregivers, and the wider community through a digital source.
As a parent myself I see many positives in having a classroom blog. Enabling parents/caregiversWhanau to peruse a wide range of learning engagements that they otherwise wouldn't see.
From the beginning of term three I have worked studiously to set up and maintain a class blog for Room 9. This blog allows learners, parents/caregivers, and the wider community to view the learning that Room 9 undertakes in and outside the classroom.
The blog also enables me to maintain a connection with the learners, parents/caregivers, and the wider community through a digital source.
As a parent myself I see many positives in having a classroom blog. Enabling parents/caregiversWhanau to peruse a wide range of learning engagements that they otherwise wouldn't see.
Thursday, 13 October 2016
Staff Meeting - Staff Personal Review BNMS 2016 - 13/10/2016
Reflection
As this meeting was about BNMS in 2017 I found it was not applicable to me. However, I did my best to complete the Review questions in a positive manner. Support from, and verbal reflections with, colleagues was very helpful.
Room 9 Literacy - Quick Write
Image of Room 9 students participating in a Quick Write session
The sentence prompt above, contains a slight variation of words: catch could be changed to caught so students could write in the past tense; and corner could be used to change the image built in the reader's mind. Both of these were changes students' suggestions, which I was happy to take on board because I believe the students would have a greater sense of ownership by having a say.
Six students decided to share their Quick Writes with the whole class, after everyone had shared their writing with the person on their left/right, (students who sat at the end of tables were encouraged to share with someone in front or behind).
Quick Writes are incredibly valuable in a busy classroom where writing often occurs in inquiry learning, reading group tasks, and in digital form.
"This a great tool to get students writing." - Gail Loane, September, 2016
Monday, 10 October 2016
Spanish Commands
During Spanish lessons, in Teaming, I tend to find myself responding or thinking in Te Reo Maaori. On reflection I realise that I need to become familiar with the expressions/commands I would like to use during these sessions, such as: stand up; sit down...
I all ready use, because I have prior knowledge of:
- Listen - Escucha
- Please - Por favor
- Repeat - Repetid
- Silence - Silencio
I have found these translations here
Stand up please: por favor de pie
Sit down please: Siéntate por favor
Sit: sentar
Stand up: Levántate
Stand up please: ponerse de pie por favor
I will be checking with a Spanish-speaking friend from Venezuela about these translations!!
I all ready use, because I have prior knowledge of:
- Listen - Escucha
- Please - Por favor
- Repeat - Repetid
- Silence - Silencio
I have found these translations here
Stand up please: por favor de pie
Sit down please: Siéntate por favor
And these translations here
sit down: siéntateSit: sentar
Stand up: Levántate
Stand up please: ponerse de pie por favor
I will be checking with a Spanish-speaking friend from Venezuela about these translations!!
Friday, 16 September 2016
Literacy Observation: Mrs Allen
Today I had the privilege of observing Room 28 teacher Mrs Allen.
I observed as Mrs Allen co-constructed with the learners, of Room 28, how they can edit/re-craft their biographies. Prior to this session they had reviewed a Tiger Woods biography, researched their chosen person, located 10 facts, and began planning/drafting. Mrs Allen provided two examples of introductions, from the learners themselves, to work on collaboratively.
Mrs Allen asked specific questions to direct learners and provided succinct feedback/feed-forward: Mrs Allen's KQs are in blue...
- Today we are going to look at two sample introductions and think about how we can edit/recraft to hook in the reader.
Learners were on the mat and were chosen at random to read aloud, reading an introduction about Richie McCaw
- What would you do now?
- What do we notice?
- How many sentences are in a paragraph (at least 4-6, written on board)
- What do we need to do in the very first sentence?
Learners put forward a range of ideas: Hook them in; make it interesting...
- How?
Short, sharp, powerful sentences; start with a quote; direct speech...
Learners came up with:
"What a try form Richie McCaw as he wins the game once again for the All Blacks."
- Lets re-craft our crafting!
- What other ways can we introduce?
Set a scene; relate to the reader; imagine they were there; use a rhetorical question: have you ever wondered...
Richie Hugh McCaw is often known as a legend as the greatest loose forward. Although he retired he is still one of the greatest rugby players in the world and would dominate in rugby if he still played.
This was then crafted with learner input:
To be more specific about his position: One of the world's greatest Open Side Flankers
Take out "often" because it is not very powerful.
Change "in the world" for "of all time" because he is one of the best players the world has ever seen.
Mrs Allen moved on to 'ending' an introduction
- How do we end the introduction?
- What's something we could do?
Learners responded with:
- State a personal opinion: I believe he is the greatest
- Use a fact
- Use humour
Mrs Allen stated: Not one person is right, not one person is wrong; independent writers continually recraft throughout writing.
Together the learners co-constructed the success criteria
- Hook (Quote; Rhetorical Q; setting the scene; relating to the reader/make it personal; state a fact)
- Introduce the person
Effective language/descriptive
- Economical language: short/sharp
- 4-6 Sentences
Mrs Allen then gave the learners explicit instructions, reminders about staying on task, and answered learners questions.
- 20 minutes of silent work, one minute to get settled; read, recraft, edit; 40 seconds, 10 seconds...
Learners asked:
- Can we restart our intro?
Mrs Allen directed her response to the whole class:
- Those who would like to restart their introduction or begin again with a new person can if they want.
Reflection/Implications for my teaching:
- Be really precise with KQs
- Provide opportunities for learners to think/pair/share
- Use examples of learners work to recraft, they relate to it and have more of a sense of ownership and responsibility.
- Keep the teacher time to a minimum to get the learners writing/re-crafting using the knowledge they have just acquired.
- I teach somewhat differently, but that isn't a bad thing, because I believe I work with a whole different classroom environment and do my best to meet the direct needs of my learners.
- Small group teaching could reach target learners to enable them to be successful, confident writers.
I observed as Mrs Allen co-constructed with the learners, of Room 28, how they can edit/re-craft their biographies. Prior to this session they had reviewed a Tiger Woods biography, researched their chosen person, located 10 facts, and began planning/drafting. Mrs Allen provided two examples of introductions, from the learners themselves, to work on collaboratively.
Mrs Allen asked specific questions to direct learners and provided succinct feedback/feed-forward: Mrs Allen's KQs are in blue...
- Today we are going to look at two sample introductions and think about how we can edit/recraft to hook in the reader.
Learners were on the mat and were chosen at random to read aloud, reading an introduction about Richie McCaw
- What would you do now?
- What do we notice?
- How many sentences are in a paragraph (at least 4-6, written on board)
- What do we need to do in the very first sentence?
Learners put forward a range of ideas: Hook them in; make it interesting...
- How?
Short, sharp, powerful sentences; start with a quote; direct speech...
Learners came up with:
"What a try form Richie McCaw as he wins the game once again for the All Blacks."
- Lets re-craft our crafting!
- What other ways can we introduce?
Set a scene; relate to the reader; imagine they were there; use a rhetorical question: have you ever wondered...
Richie Hugh McCaw is often known as a legend as the greatest loose forward. Although he retired he is still one of the greatest rugby players in the world and would dominate in rugby if he still played.
This was then crafted with learner input:
To be more specific about his position: One of the world's greatest Open Side Flankers
Take out "often" because it is not very powerful.
Change "in the world" for "of all time" because he is one of the best players the world has ever seen.
Mrs Allen moved on to 'ending' an introduction
- How do we end the introduction?
- What's something we could do?
Learners responded with:
- State a personal opinion: I believe he is the greatest
- Use a fact
- Use humour
Mrs Allen stated: Not one person is right, not one person is wrong; independent writers continually recraft throughout writing.
Together the learners co-constructed the success criteria
- Hook (Quote; Rhetorical Q; setting the scene; relating to the reader/make it personal; state a fact)
- Introduce the person
Effective language/descriptive
- Economical language: short/sharp
- 4-6 Sentences
Mrs Allen then gave the learners explicit instructions, reminders about staying on task, and answered learners questions.
- 20 minutes of silent work, one minute to get settled; read, recraft, edit; 40 seconds, 10 seconds...
Learners asked:
- Can we restart our intro?
Mrs Allen directed her response to the whole class:
- Those who would like to restart their introduction or begin again with a new person can if they want.
Reflection/Implications for my teaching:
- Be really precise with KQs
- Provide opportunities for learners to think/pair/share
- Use examples of learners work to recraft, they relate to it and have more of a sense of ownership and responsibility.
- Keep the teacher time to a minimum to get the learners writing/re-crafting using the knowledge they have just acquired.
- I teach somewhat differently, but that isn't a bad thing, because I believe I work with a whole different classroom environment and do my best to meet the direct needs of my learners.
- Small group teaching could reach target learners to enable them to be successful, confident writers.
Literacy Observation: Mrs Allen
Today I had the privilege of observing Room 28 teacher Mrs Allen.
I observed as Mrs Allen co-constructed with the learners, of Room 28, how they can edited/re-craft their biographies. Prior to this session they had reviewed a Tiger Woods biography, researched their chosen person, located 10 facts, and began planning/drafting. Mrs Allen provided two examples of introductions, from the learners themselves, to work on collaboratively.
Mrs Allen asked specific questions to direct learners and provided succinct feedback/feed-forward: Mrs Allen's KQs are in blue...
- Today we are going to look at two sample introductions and think about how we can edit/recraft to hook in the reader.
Learners were on the mat and were chosen at random to read aloud, reading an introduction about Richie McCaw
- What would you do now?
- What do we notice?
- How many sentences are in a paragraph (at least 4-6, written on board)
- What do we need to do in the very first sentence?
Learners put forward a range of ideas: Hook them in; make it interesting...
- How?
Short, sharp, powerful sentences; start with a quote; direct speech...
Learners came up with:
"What a try form Richie McCaw as he wins the game once again for the All Blacks."
- Lets re-craft our crafting!
- What other ways can we introduce?
Set a scene; relate to the reader; imagine they were there; use a rhetorical question: have you ever wondered...
Richie Hugh McCaw is often known as a legend as the greatest loose forward. Although he retired he is still one of the greatest rugby players in the world and would dominate in rugby if he still played.
This was then crafted with learner input:
To be more specific about his position: One of the world's greatest Open Side Flankers
Take out "often" because it is not very powerful.
Change "in the world" for "of all time" because he is one of the best players the world has ever seen.
Mrs Allen moved on to 'ending' an introduction
- How do we end the introduction?
- What's something we could do?
Learners responded with:
- State a personal opinion: I believe he is the greatest
- Use a fact
- Use humour
Mrs Allen stated: Not one person is right, not one person is wrong; independent writers continually recraft throughout writing.
Together the learners co-constructed the success criteria
- Hook (Quote; Rhetorical Q; setting the scene; relating to the reader/make it personal; state a fact)
- Introduce the person
Effective language/descriptive
- Economical language: short/sharp
- 4-6 Sentences
Mrs Allen then gave the learners explicit instructions, reminders about staying on task, and answered learners questions.
- 20 minutes of silent work, one minute to get settled; read, recraft, edit; 40 seconds, 10 seconds...
Learners asked:
- Can we restart our intro?
Mrs Allen directed her response to the whole class:
- Those who would like to restart their introduction or begin again with a new person can if they want.
Reflection/Implications for my teaching:
- Be really precise with KQs
- Provide opportunities for learners to think/pair/share
- Use examples of learners work to recraft, they relate to it and have more of a sense of ownership and responsibility.
- Keep the teacher time to a minimum to get the learners writing/re-crafting using the knowledge they have just acquired.
- I teach somewhat differently, but that isn't a bad thing because I believe I ma meeting the direct needs of my learners.
- Small group teaching could reach target learners to enable them to be successful and develop confidence about their abilities as writers.
I observed as Mrs Allen co-constructed with the learners, of Room 28, how they can edited/re-craft their biographies. Prior to this session they had reviewed a Tiger Woods biography, researched their chosen person, located 10 facts, and began planning/drafting. Mrs Allen provided two examples of introductions, from the learners themselves, to work on collaboratively.
Mrs Allen asked specific questions to direct learners and provided succinct feedback/feed-forward: Mrs Allen's KQs are in blue...
- Today we are going to look at two sample introductions and think about how we can edit/recraft to hook in the reader.
Learners were on the mat and were chosen at random to read aloud, reading an introduction about Richie McCaw
- What would you do now?
- What do we notice?
- How many sentences are in a paragraph (at least 4-6, written on board)
- What do we need to do in the very first sentence?
Learners put forward a range of ideas: Hook them in; make it interesting...
- How?
Short, sharp, powerful sentences; start with a quote; direct speech...
Learners came up with:
"What a try form Richie McCaw as he wins the game once again for the All Blacks."
- Lets re-craft our crafting!
- What other ways can we introduce?
Set a scene; relate to the reader; imagine they were there; use a rhetorical question: have you ever wondered...
Richie Hugh McCaw is often known as a legend as the greatest loose forward. Although he retired he is still one of the greatest rugby players in the world and would dominate in rugby if he still played.
This was then crafted with learner input:
To be more specific about his position: One of the world's greatest Open Side Flankers
Take out "often" because it is not very powerful.
Change "in the world" for "of all time" because he is one of the best players the world has ever seen.
Mrs Allen moved on to 'ending' an introduction
- How do we end the introduction?
- What's something we could do?
Learners responded with:
- State a personal opinion: I believe he is the greatest
- Use a fact
- Use humour
Mrs Allen stated: Not one person is right, not one person is wrong; independent writers continually recraft throughout writing.
Together the learners co-constructed the success criteria
- Hook (Quote; Rhetorical Q; setting the scene; relating to the reader/make it personal; state a fact)
- Introduce the person
Effective language/descriptive
- Economical language: short/sharp
- 4-6 Sentences
Mrs Allen then gave the learners explicit instructions, reminders about staying on task, and answered learners questions.
- 20 minutes of silent work, one minute to get settled; read, recraft, edit; 40 seconds, 10 seconds...
Learners asked:
- Can we restart our intro?
Mrs Allen directed her response to the whole class:
- Those who would like to restart their introduction or begin again with a new person can if they want.
Reflection/Implications for my teaching:
- Be really precise with KQs
- Provide opportunities for learners to think/pair/share
- Use examples of learners work to recraft, they relate to it and have more of a sense of ownership and responsibility.
- Keep the teacher time to a minimum to get the learners writing/re-crafting using the knowledge they have just acquired.
- I teach somewhat differently, but that isn't a bad thing because I believe I ma meeting the direct needs of my learners.
- Small group teaching could reach target learners to enable them to be successful and develop confidence about their abilities as writers.
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